07-27-2016, 07:18 AM
Hi Lizzie,
I like the poem but not too keen on the title, it feels like it's a cliche or a cliche by proxy (sort of). The poem says what the title says anyway so it could also be said that it's redundant. Another possible issue with 'golden girl', if there was another way of saying this it would be good.
I like a poem that makes me think and this one has done that.
slight digression—Your poem actually made me think of Great White Sharks. I used to be fascinated by them and once read that even though 3 or 4 sharks may be conceived only one is born. The strongest one kills the other sharks in the womb. "Life values nothing but its own continuation"—digression over
Thanks for the read,
Mark
I like the poem but not too keen on the title, it feels like it's a cliche or a cliche by proxy (sort of). The poem says what the title says anyway so it could also be said that it's redundant. Another possible issue with 'golden girl', if there was another way of saying this it would be good.
I like a poem that makes me think and this one has done that.
slight digression—Your poem actually made me think of Great White Sharks. I used to be fascinated by them and once read that even though 3 or 4 sharks may be conceived only one is born. The strongest one kills the other sharks in the womb. "Life values nothing but its own continuation"—digression over
Thanks for the read,
Mark
wae aye man ye radgie