The Sallman Head -- edit 3

[Lizzie]

show—the radiant show, the halo show, --I wonder if show and its repetitions are really helping. This is a 4 on a scale of 1-10 issue for me so it's a minor thing. What if you simply cut show in each instance?
the skin show—fair faced

I did try it and I wasn't satisfied. But, if they intrude, I will find a way to cut them. Necessity, mothers, and all.

Thanks so much for coming back to it ><

I like that white space idea, too. I'll play with that. Thanks!