Wet Earth Waltz

[ellajam]

Hi, WJ, only one nit here for me.

The sweet loam air of morning in July Nice start, I'm smelling it.
spritzes from the feet of a girl No. The air spritzes from her feet? No. And I'd like "her feet" instead of how you've phrased it.
stalking frogs around a pond.

Her approach is steady, careful, vital. Vital is great here, adds that buzz.

There’s a gravity to the moment
before she pounces, a frozen breathlessness
that creeps up your spine and into your headspace
as though a race is about to start,
or a pretty woman’s met your eyes.
Big fan of this whole strophe. You may not need the comma after "start" but I love every bit of this.

It ends with a splash
as laughter echoes heroically,
despite her empty hands.
Again, I'm not sure you need the comma. Heroically is a bit odd but I like it.

Thanks for the read, I've been enjoying it.