Impossible angel

[Lizzie]

Impossible angel

Beer and cigarettes -- would you consider adding "and you" on to the end of this line? Then it would set the scene right in the first line, and ending on "you" would call additional attention to the subject. Totally minor, just a thought.
and you, your languid locks,
are always in my world of drunken walks
through Barbican and Bishopsgate,
in the moonbeam shallows
of walls spattered with poetry.

Thursday nights your longing is a sea -- do you need Thursday nights? It seems to delay the satisfaction of the poetry/sea rhyme too long.
crossing through hours of drunkenness. -- you probably need a different word here or above since this is the second time you've used drunk. I actually think that I would leave this one and cut the other, because here it could also refer to being drunk on love for the person. I don't understand how a sea crosses, either.
Mindful glances in the mermaid shadows  -- I don't understand "mermaid shadows" but I like it. It's evocative.
turn not to me.

Impossible angel
that runs not to me. -- who runs? I don't know what's correct, but who sounds better to me.

But runs to the deep sea's emptiness
in the white frothed wave that follows
the moon's pale lamp of loneliness
that burns not for me. -- I think this sentence is missing a subject. Otherwise, I think this stanza is perfect.

I think its beautiful -- it made me feel things.

Thanks for sharing! Hope this is helpful.

lizziep