07-16-2016, 04:16 AM
You used four words that are fairly uncommon and to what purpose. More common words could have been used with no loss of meaning or subtly. You do your reader no favors using such words. Had they added a context that the normal word have lacked, I can see the justification, but to me they come across as just trying to impress. I make no judgement, there have been many times in my younger years where I written with thesaurus in hand.
I have a fairly extensive vocabulary as I have been over educated in the halls of academia and have on average read a book a day for most of my life, as well as a number journals and if I have to refer to the diction four times in a short poem there is something amiss.
Why is this important (the word use not my history)? Every time a person has to pause due to a word choice, it is disruptive to the poem and takes away the enjoyment of the poem. If there are enough of these sort of words, the person usually gives up on the poem as being not worth the effort. The poem is already somewhat obscure so this only compounds the problem.
Best,
dale
I have a fairly extensive vocabulary as I have been over educated in the halls of academia and have on average read a book a day for most of my life, as well as a number journals and if I have to refer to the diction four times in a short poem there is something amiss.
Why is this important (the word use not my history)? Every time a person has to pause due to a word choice, it is disruptive to the poem and takes away the enjoyment of the poem. If there are enough of these sort of words, the person usually gives up on the poem as being not worth the effort. The poem is already somewhat obscure so this only compounds the problem.
Best,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.