07-15-2016, 07:13 AM
Shay,
Thanks for your comments. No I was not fond of the "worth to birth" segment either. Not the idea, per se, but the way it is written. Seems a little cheap, but that's what I had so that is what I went with and I have nothing better, but it is duly noted.
" It could be interesting with a detail added to it. But that's pure preference here." Ah! But detail is what I was trying to avoid.
The rest I believe I have corrected.
Thanks,
dale
Thanks for your comments. No I was not fond of the "worth to birth" segment either. Not the idea, per se, but the way it is written. Seems a little cheap, but that's what I had so that is what I went with and I have nothing better, but it is duly noted.
" It could be interesting with a detail added to it. But that's pure preference here." Ah! But detail is what I was trying to avoid.
The rest I believe I have corrected.
Thanks,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.