Unwelcome (revison # 1)

[Achebe]

Unwelcome


You stepped into my mind
last night as I dreamed wildflowers ....tell me if I'm wrong, but it seems to me that the opener was your inspiration for the poem. It's a great opening that must've popped into your head one day, but the rest of the poem is a bit of a struggle. I might borrow your opening for one of my own poems. It's quite lovely. I don't have much to say about the rest of the poem, except that it's not of the same standard. Sorry for not being more specific.
the lapwings swooped down
and soon you were descending
from a talon
 
I smiled as I watched
you disintegrate into ash
then disappear from my dream universe
 
You’ve never been invited
never welcomed there
but I’m sure you’ll intrude again
if for nothing else
you’ll wannabe the overwhelming primrose
and it’ll be satisfying to see your exclusion
once again
 
Next time you could get buried
under a mountain of gooseberries
and shoveled into the back of a farm truck
hauling prickly pears
then packaged and shipped
to someplace like the Brazil
or even the Bermuda Triangle
 
Where you’d be swallowed whole
as your existence gets digested
and the print on your birth certificate
fades into the obscure
 
Maybe then you’d never come back
never step into my dreams
uninvited.