Brahma

[Magpie]

Dale,

I have only just discovered that there is such a thing as the 'Stability - Instability Paradox' which sheds a bit more light on your poem, so with that in mind I'll do what I should of done yesterday and comment on the poem.

I understand why you have chosen Brahma and the connection with the number 4, however I may be missing something else important as I don't fully understand the idea with the first line and the four-three-two-one count. The colon makes it appear as though it could be a ratio which I'm sure is not your intention.

Considering the fact that I just told you that I discovered the 'Stability - Instability Paradox' merely moments ago then the fact that I'm about to say that the last line seems cliche may sound a bit strange. I get the idea of the paradox and the fact that the word 'stability' is found in the word 'instability' but it comes over as a bit obvious. Although my possible suggestion may have took too far away in the opposite direction and it sounds a bit like a cryptic crossword clue... but something along the lines of...
      
Siva within passivity/passiveness or Passiveness around Siva

Or something along those lines... I may have gone too cryptic.

Thanks for the read, it's kept me thinking and I'm glad I could come back to it. It was a bit ignorant of me yesterday to not comment on the actual content.

Cheers,

Mark