07-04-2016, 05:01 PM
Thanks for your thoughts River, the political aspect of your reading wasn't intended, but I like that it can be viewed from another perspective.
I can see your trouble with the sweat, as everything else in the poem is more or less literal imagery. I meant sweat as in the idioms: "don't sweat the small stuff", or "don't sweat it" - meaning worrying about, or stressing over. I liked it because it meant that, but sweating was also somewhat fitting to the image of sitting in the sun (although as you point out, a hammock doesn't actually sweat). I might change that word if I can think of something better.
I can see your trouble with the sweat, as everything else in the poem is more or less literal imagery. I meant sweat as in the idioms: "don't sweat the small stuff", or "don't sweat it" - meaning worrying about, or stressing over. I liked it because it meant that, but sweating was also somewhat fitting to the image of sitting in the sun (although as you point out, a hammock doesn't actually sweat). I might change that word if I can think of something better.