The glow disappears behind the enlightened

[shemthepenman]

I like this. There you go. Thanks.

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Title is wordy though.

thanks. and the title troubled me, too, for its wordiness. for such a short poem an' all. also, it sounds a bit like it's saying of the poem "hey look at me, i'm a metaphor!" patronising the reader is never good. but, and i don't use this pathetic defense lightly, i kinda just like it. it adds a certain complexity beyond the simple metaphor. however, any suggestions for an alternative title are more than welcome. i probably won't use them, but they are definitely welcome. who doesn't like getting free stuff!