The glow disappears behind the enlightened
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Since I'm currently working in the library, just one comment:
(06-30-2016, 10:11 AM)shemthepenman Wrote:  He waited all day,
poor moth,
and died in the room

where the light had lead him. led
Otherwise, satisfying -- although there's something about "and" that perturbs me -- maybe that, "then", too?


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RE: The glow disappears behind the enlightened - by RiverNotch - 06-30-2016, 04:34 PM
RE: The glow disappears behind the enlightened - by justlikeyou - 06-30-2016, 11:12 PM



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