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The glow disappears behind the enlightened

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06-30-2016, 04:34 PM

Since I'm currently working in the library, just one comment:

(06-30-2016, 10:11 AM)shemthepenman Wrote: He waited all day,
poor moth,
and died in the room
where the light had lead him. led

Otherwise, satisfying -- although there's something about "and" that perturbs me -- maybe that, "then", too?

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The glow disappears behind the enlightened - by shemthepenman - 06-30-2016, 10:11 AM

RE: The glow disappears behind the enlightened - by Lizzie - 06-30-2016, 11:24 AM

RE: The glow disappears behind the enlightened - by shemthepenman - 06-30-2016, 01:42 PM

RE: The glow disappears behind the enlightened - by RiverNotch - 06-30-2016, 04:34 PM

RE: The glow disappears behind the enlightened - by shemthepenman - 06-30-2016, 04:55 PM

RE: The glow disappears behind the enlightened - by RiverNotch - 06-30-2016, 06:35 PM

RE: The glow disappears behind the enlightened - by shemthepenman - 06-30-2016, 10:35 PM

RE: The glow disappears behind the enlightened - by justlikeyou - 06-30-2016, 11:12 PM

RE: The glow disappears behind the enlightened - by Erthona - 07-01-2016, 08:04 AM

RE: The glow disappears behind the enlightened - by shemthepenman - 07-01-2016, 08:17 AM

RE: The glow disappears behind the enlightened - by QDeathstar - 07-02-2016, 07:08 AM

RE: The glow disappears behind the enlightened - by shemthepenman - 07-02-2016, 08:08 AM

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