06-29-2016, 01:07 AM
I too am new here. I lack Vanity's insight . I read this without any preconceptions.
First let me encourage you. Never give in to the fear of posting. We are all here because we want to share our thoughts and skills. We want to learn and grow.
I am not one to critique form or structure. If I can read it easily and gain a vision from it then the poem has done it's job for me.
This poem is a pleasure to read and has a universal message. Some circumstances may be more extreme than others. Once we escape the teenage years of self-loathing or self admiration we are tend to reevaluate. This process continues for the rest of our lives. Do I like me now, did I like me then, if then was now how would I feel about it? All questions most of us process routinely.
I especially like
"Now, all I have
is a dog and some daydreams
visions of grandeur laid to rest
at the foot of my former insanity. "
Great line. Please continue to include us in your journey.
First let me encourage you. Never give in to the fear of posting. We are all here because we want to share our thoughts and skills. We want to learn and grow.
I am not one to critique form or structure. If I can read it easily and gain a vision from it then the poem has done it's job for me.
This poem is a pleasure to read and has a universal message. Some circumstances may be more extreme than others. Once we escape the teenage years of self-loathing or self admiration we are tend to reevaluate. This process continues for the rest of our lives. Do I like me now, did I like me then, if then was now how would I feel about it? All questions most of us process routinely.
I especially like
"Now, all I have
is a dog and some daydreams
visions of grandeur laid to rest
at the foot of my former insanity. "
Great line. Please continue to include us in your journey.