The Sallman Head -- edit 3

The Sallman Head -- edit 3

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06-25-2016, 03:20 PM

(06-25-2016, 11:15 AM)lizziep Wrote: Todd: is it ok that those two stanzas now both end in the same word?

It doesn't bother me in the slightest. I'm sure some people might get hung up on that. If it bothers you is the main thing.

I liked the poem on the first read and the revision has been an improvement.

Very cool poem.

The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson

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The Sallman Head -- edit 3 - by Lizzie - 06-15-2016, 10:14 AM

RE: The Light Show - by Wjames - 06-15-2016, 04:01 PM

RE: The Light Show - by Lizzie - 06-15-2016, 04:19 PM

RE: The Light Show - by justcloudy - 06-16-2016, 04:22 AM

RE: The Light Show - by Lizzie - 06-16-2016, 04:32 AM

RE: The Sallman Head - by Lizzie - 06-22-2016, 04:43 PM

RE: The Sallman Head - by Erthona - 06-24-2016, 01:59 AM

RE: The Sallman Head - by Todd - 06-24-2016, 02:49 AM

RE: The Sallman Head - by Lizzie - 06-25-2016, 11:15 AM

RE: The Sallman Head - by Todd - 06-25-2016, 03:20 PM

RE: The Sallman Head -- edit 2 - by LunaDeLore - 06-26-2016, 12:17 AM

RE: The Sallman Head -- edit 2 - by kolemath - 06-29-2016, 11:24 PM

RE: The Sallman Head -- edit 2 - by Lizzie - 06-30-2016, 03:48 AM

RE: The Sallman Head -- edit 2 - by kolemath - 06-30-2016, 08:00 AM

RE: The Sallman Head -- edit 2 - by Lizzie - 06-30-2016, 08:58 AM

RE: The Sallman Head -- edit 2 - by kolemath - 06-30-2016, 09:25 AM

RE: The Sallman Head -- edit 2 - by Lizzie - 06-30-2016, 09:37 AM

RE: The Sallman Head -- edit 2 - by kolemath - 06-30-2016, 09:50 AM

RE: The Sallman Head -- edit 2 - by RiverNotch - 06-30-2016, 07:38 PM

RE: The Sallman Head -- edit 2 - by Lizzie - 07-01-2016, 08:49 PM

RE: The Sallman Head -- edit 2 - by RiverNotch - 07-04-2016, 04:31 PM

RE: The Sallman Head -- edit 2 - by aschueler - 07-05-2016, 09:09 AM

RE: The Sallman Head -- edit 3 - by Lizzie - 07-27-2016, 05:50 AM

RE: The Sallman Head -- edit 3 - by Todd - 07-27-2016, 06:31 AM

RE: The Sallman Head -- edit 3 - by Lizzie - 07-27-2016, 06:37 AM

RE: The Sallman Head -- edit 3 - by RiverNotch - 07-28-2016, 02:32 AM

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