Thoughts on Free Thought

[LunaDeLore]

Thanks Joseph! I'm not sure exactly the name of the style or even if it has a name. I suppose it's similar to a villanelle with the repeated lines, just with modifications to meter and rhyme scheme. I appreciate the feedback, thanks for commenting! 

Sean,

This work is certainly metered but not villanelle. Typically, the villanelle consists of four eight line stanzas with a one-two line refrain at the end of each stanza.  What you have here is four five line stanzas. No bones there though we all test the waters and try new things. You do show good use with the iambic but is any work ever perfect?


I'm free to think and do as I please.
Unbound and freed by Socrates-
To live and dream and spread the word
Of lessons often left unheard.
For from within, one finds their peace.

I'm free to think and do as I please.
No walls or chains or locks or keys ------ As a reader I need some commas before each "or" just for a breather if nothing else.
Can suffocate or dominate
My innate need to cogitate.
For from within, one finds their peace.

I'm free to think and do as I please.
Opposing vile tyrannies-
A call to all, though few will heed. --------For some reason this feels to well used
By my own will I intercede.
For from within, one finds their peace.

I won’t be bound by foreign will.
No rule so bold and brash and shrill
Shall box my precious sanctity
Of individuality.
By my own will I have found peace. -----This last line seems awkward


Hope I've Helped

Luna