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06-19-2016, 04:23 PM

Hi!
I'm afraid I didn't really like this-only because I don't fully understand its purpose. I think it needs more...direction. Maybe you could try to lengthen it with some more concrete imagery. There is some sulfur/lava ect...and it has an ominous tone ...but I just don't get what's happening.
Good luck--V

"Why do you suppose we only feel compelled to chase the ones who run away?" -Vicomte de Valmont, Dangerous Liasons

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For the Heights (Edit 2) - by Weeded - 06-12-2016, 04:14 PM

RE: For the Heights - by Joseph Didis - 06-13-2016, 03:02 AM

RE: For the Heights - by Weeded - 06-14-2016, 09:09 AM

RE: For the Heights - by Erthona - 06-13-2016, 03:16 AM

RE: For the Heights - by homer1950 - 06-17-2016, 12:22 PM

RE: For the Heights - by Andrias - 06-18-2016, 05:31 AM

RE: For the Heights - by Vanity - 06-19-2016, 04:23 PM

RE: For the Heights - by Weeded - 06-21-2016, 12:03 PM

RE: For the Heights (Edit 1) - by Magpie - 06-23-2016, 05:51 PM

RE: For the Heights (Edit 1) - by Weeded - 06-24-2016, 09:51 AM

RE: For the Heights (Edit 2) - by Magpie - 07-05-2016, 05:23 PM

RE: For the Heights (Edit 2) - by Weeded - 07-07-2016, 05:51 AM

RE: For the Heights (Edit 2) - by RiverNotch - 07-09-2016, 11:36 PM

RE: For the Heights (Edit 2) - by Weeded - 07-16-2016, 12:05 PM

RE: For the Heights (Edit 2) - by amejadcc - 07-28-2016, 12:05 AM

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