Eve

[Acephale]

Hi Acephale,

If I am being truly honest your piece reads a bit like a wikipiedia page then a passionet artistic poem. I mean St. Teresa was a passionate woman, (I know they are not big on quoting outside sources here, but I think it is relevant to my critique) here is just one quote;
"Accustom yourself continually to make many acts of love, for they enkindle and melt the soul." (St. Teresa of Avila)  

I think an ode poem like this should reflect more of the spirit of the person you are honoring. Hope this wasn't too sharp not meant to be, I just know you have passion ready to unleash in your work.

Hmm, that's interesting and I thank you for the feedback. The poem doesn't seem to be conveying the message I want. This is not an ode, but more of a cunning satire. Mother Teresa and St. Teresa of Avila are both people who saw original sin from a very warped perception. Avila was filled with a genuine self-hatred for herself and women in general, and mother Teresa believed suffering was beautiful and not something that should be prevented. It's also not about them, but about Eve, who I see as a symbolic figure of the beginning of women following a patriarchal structure, because they couldn't control their sexuality.