Eve

[homer1950]

Hi Acephale,

If I am being truly honest your piece reads a bit like a wikipiedia page then a passionet artistic poem. I mean St. Teresa was a passionate woman, (I know they are not big on quoting outside sources here, but I think it is relevant to my critique) here is just one quote;
"Accustom yourself continually to make many acts of love, for they enkindle and melt the soul." (St. Teresa of Avila)  

I think an ode poem like this should reflect more of the spirit of the person you are honoring. Hope this wasn't too sharp not meant to be, I just know you have passion ready to unleash in your work.

My name is Eve and I was separated from the light.
If you look into a pit you can see my affectionate gaze,
the mother of man and all its saints; for I am the breeder of repulsion. 

I bore two men to covet the earth,
yet neither could dominate its daughters.
Among my favorites Teresa was born,
so the Lord created her twice.

In Ávila, she was inspired
with every creation brought forth,
as she watched mother's corpse generate more,
so Terese ate twigs for penance, mortified her flesh
with the faith the Lord would grant salvation. 

Albania, reveled in the sickly - a perfection she found supreme. 
Christ could be found in their torment
where she understood what others could not
that God never intended to create them in his image, 
but to resemble the man within - 
and so she burned in their embers and bathed in its ash
for Christ was the path to catharsis. 

My name is Eve and I govern the night
If you look through the woodlands you can feel my dismissive gaze,
the mother of orphans and all that's divine;
for I am the catalyst of love.