06-15-2016, 04:06 PM
Thanks very much to all who responded and took the time to critique. I'm now editing this on my laptop, incorporating advice.
I always have trouble with punctuation...sometimes I feel like my line break is my 'pause/comma' but I know that doesn't always translate. I also have 'capitalization issues' lol--I mean my iPad doesn't help, but sometimes I'm not sure where I want them....then I end up with an amazingly long run on sentance with line breaks...
I'm working on polishing this up so I can submit it to a literary magazine. (Crossing fingers)
I always have trouble with punctuation...sometimes I feel like my line break is my 'pause/comma' but I know that doesn't always translate. I also have 'capitalization issues' lol--I mean my iPad doesn't help, but sometimes I'm not sure where I want them....then I end up with an amazingly long run on sentance with line breaks...
I'm working on polishing this up so I can submit it to a literary magazine. (Crossing fingers)
"Why do you suppose we only feel compelled to chase the ones who run away?" -Vicomte de Valmont, Dangerous Liasons