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[Magpie]

Hi and welcome to the site. A love poem is a brave way to start, simply because a lot of people think that it is so hard to write original love poetry without it being cliche. There doesn't appear to be any glaring cliches in your poem and a couple of the phrases are quite pleasing, I particularly like the use of 'cocoon'.
A couple of the line breaks read awkwardly for me, line 2-3 in particular.
The phrase 'your gaze piercing me like a scream' seems to be at odds with the overall feeling of the poem, it just feels a bit harsh.

Thanks for the read,

Mark