06-13-2016, 04:12 PM
Hello! I really enjoyed this...it grabbed me...I love the first line. I have actually thought that before (-: so I felt a kinship with the poem.
I felt you were saying--upstairs is where you can run away, escape reality, read or ruminate...
'To save my sick mother' made me frown, because I instantly thought of a sickroom upstairs, and sadness.
'The ship with Windows closed' well, for whatever reason I pictured, like, a submarine. Maybe that's way far off from your intent. But I believe it's meant to depict another cozy/safe place to be alone...and think. I can relate to that.
I liked your ending line as well 'I think I'll go downstairs...' As if you are ready to face reality/other people/outside stimuli, after your sojourn upstairs. (-:
Good luck--V
I felt you were saying--upstairs is where you can run away, escape reality, read or ruminate...
'To save my sick mother' made me frown, because I instantly thought of a sickroom upstairs, and sadness.
'The ship with Windows closed' well, for whatever reason I pictured, like, a submarine. Maybe that's way far off from your intent. But I believe it's meant to depict another cozy/safe place to be alone...and think. I can relate to that.
I liked your ending line as well 'I think I'll go downstairs...' As if you are ready to face reality/other people/outside stimuli, after your sojourn upstairs. (-:
Good luck--V