06-09-2016, 07:34 AM
(06-08-2016, 11:40 AM)ariii Wrote: Is there a reason you didn't use the line "like a statue" again? I think that might work better for you.Yeah, the image is of a snake raised up and pausing before it strikes. The central question being raised is, "Will the writer stick or strike?" A hand, raised to write on the page, looks (at least to me) a bit like a snake preparing to strike. Snake was not an after thought -- it was intended to resolve the questions with a surprising twist. I do think that it succeeded in surprising, just not pleasantly.
