Letting You Go

[mitsuch]

Hey! Since it seems like you haven't been able to figure out a way to express these clear thoughts in a manner that seems evocative and engaging, I would like to suggest something. It would be an interesting twist if you try to use shakespearan formation of sentences to express these similar thoughts, hence keeping the beauty of the clear cut meaning, yet keeping it a form of art.
I will provide some examples and as the first few reviewers said, try to use some figures of speech to really put across your feelings.

Letting You Go
I keep walking until I feel numb
not aware of the world around me, or even myself
I can’t feel anything or maybe I just don’t want to, - I cannot feel, or is it that I do not wish to?
because if I do it would make all of this real - as if I do so, it is real.
It would make you real
it would make us real
and it would make you leaving real

And maybe I’m just scared - Maybe the fear is what grips me
Scared that if I open myself up, tear myself open,
this emptiness inside me would become what completely defines me
Threatening me
Breaking me
Daring me to collapse

And I don’t know if I can fill the void where everything that was once there
Surrounded you.
Was made of you
And only you.

So I’ll be numb
I’ll be numb to this pain
Numb to the memories,
and numb to the sound of your name
I’ll be numb to the point where I can’t even feel my own tears