Imagining Disaster, previously "Stuck," edit 1

[Vanity]

I like this...very nice, zippy and visual.
Stuck


Could I stick this way:
pen a centimeter from the page,
       poised –I like 'poised'
       like a statue?

Could sap encase me, salty tears seal me?i like the visuals of time...slowly, like sap...dehydrating tears into salt...Yes!
Could I corrode like a rusty relic...I hear the alliteration of could-corrode and rusty--relic. Then, lots of punchy p sounds in the next bit- paraded, patron, pilgrims, pray, pen ....it doesn't hit you on the head, but for me it's part of the sound it makes when I scan it that I like.
paraded through the streets –
the patron saint of marble tongues?
Would pilgrims pray at my pen,
       pausing –
       like statues?

Maybe I'd stick like Zen legends,
mummifying through meditation,
becoming a picture – a pose – a piece of prose,
my pen a centimeter from the page,for me I really dig the ' pose/prose' part again...and all the rapid fire alliteration--and I particularly like the ending image of the snake. It's like a mic drop at the end of a poem .
       poised –
       like a snake.

Weeeell, I hope that was in some way helpful. Nice job !--V