Green Tyranny
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(06-07-2016, 05:48 AM)dukealien Wrote:  Green Tyranny I was kinda hoping for a complaint against environmentalism (say, the video below), but then I got Babette's Feast. Really happy now my recently filled stomach was watching The Godfather rather than Babette's Feast before this, haha, although all those people eating pasta....



Last Sunday morning, having made Mmm, Sunday morning haute cuisine.....
a single serving of Eggs Benedict
but with smoked salmon and
a Sauce Bearnaise instead of Hollandaise,
I plated it on antique glass, Somewhat missing an "an", although it's not really necessary.
watched carefully, trod slowly
so as not to spill a drop
of such laboriously founded victuals The wordiness of "laboriously founded victuals" is a real funny contrast to everything else's jargony simplicity; well, everything else but the title, "decently concealed", and the last line. Which I'm guessing is part of the point -- lovely!
and saw the fair white Sauce Bearnaise
when brought beneath the light of twisty bulbs
turn pea-soup green. Not really a complaint, but "pea-soup" brought a whole 'nother spectrum of flavors here that just made me hungrier. I didn't realize it was a genuine complaint until the next stanza, but then if the word was anything more disgusting (or less genuine), I would have been put-off altogether. Which, again, is not really a complaint, just a wee note.

Thank God the egg that lay beneath,
its yolk poached golden yellow,
at least was decently concealed! Do you really need 'at least'? It does make the cadence more even, but its fillery nature sticks out like hamburger buns a half-inch too thick....
It all ate well, but what a shock - Grammatically, this would read better without the dash, but then that bit of distance makes it more shocking -- I guess now, my mind revolts against the dash because I seek to curtail my abuse of it. That is, I'm not sure about the dash.
fine food turned sickly by
a heinous, tyrant spectrum. Sunday biley Sunday, eh?

A treat, but, truly, my great problem with this is no dessert. Either a sequel or some offhand mention of, say, Basil ice cream will do, thank you. Smile
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Green Tyranny - by dukealien - 06-07-2016, 05:48 AM
RE: Green Tyranny - by Achebe - 06-07-2016, 06:44 AM
RE: Green Tyranny - by Quixilated - 06-07-2016, 08:03 AM
RE: Green Tyranny - by DavidF - 06-07-2016, 08:42 AM
RE: Green Tyranny - by dukealien - 06-07-2016, 10:40 AM
RE: Green Tyranny - by DavidF - 06-07-2016, 11:41 AM
RE: Green Tyranny - by Leanne - 06-07-2016, 11:36 AM
RE: Green Tyranny - by RiverNotch - 06-07-2016, 06:45 PM
RE: Green Tyranny - by ellajam - 06-07-2016, 09:12 PM
RE: Green Tyranny - by Keith - 06-07-2016, 10:46 PM
RE: Green Tyranny - by dukealien - 06-08-2016, 02:30 AM
RE: Green Tyranny - by Namyh - 06-12-2016, 06:20 AM



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