No Apollo

[DavidF]

So, again, good opening idea, but ultimately, bplffft. Might be better as just

Today I ran, and the Sun shone.
I envy the Sun,
who alone knows
the things you enjoy.

though that still feels a little too prosaic.

'He knows the things that bring joy to the people he's touched' 

is not quite fully contained in your
 
'who alone knows the things you enjoy.'


I am genuinely surprised that critics seem convinced the repetition was without purpose. Still I guess I am learning something.

Bplfft indeed.

D.