06-06-2016, 10:03 PM
The repetitions are why the poem 'loses its way' as a poem. Different if it were a song.
The two 'things' and two 'knows' don't refer to different 'things' and 'knows' but is the exact same word I the exact same context. If you meant otherwise, it's not coming through.
The first repetition is ok, the second overdoes it.
But your poem.
The two 'things' and two 'knows' don't refer to different 'things' and 'knows' but is the exact same word I the exact same context. If you meant otherwise, it's not coming through.
The first repetition is ok, the second overdoes it.
But your poem.
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe