06-03-2016, 07:46 PM
Hi tectak - I couldn't understand why you started with some (in my opinion unnecessary) alliteration, then abandoned it suddenly.
That distracted me from the rest of the piece. The sudden change from third to second person towards the end was another distraction.
That distracted me from the rest of the piece. The sudden change from third to second person towards the end was another distraction.
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe