Sweat -- edit 2
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I get that the sweat is from anxiety, but as fight-or-flight is a universal response, so is sweating to higher temperatures.....that is, as I said, with your piece starting with the very neutral statement of the speaker sweating, any reader living in a country where sun is commoner than fear might, like me, be led to the wrong thought --- although now I get why iced is there a bit better, yet it still sounds awkward.
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Sweat -- edit 2 - by Lizzie - 05-28-2016, 09:16 AM
RE: Sweat -- short poem - by QDeathstar - 05-28-2016, 11:35 AM
RE: Sweat -- short poem - by Lizzie - 05-28-2016, 01:40 PM
RE: Sweat -- short poem - by Leanne - 05-29-2016, 05:56 AM
RE: Sweat -- short poem - by billy - 05-29-2016, 12:16 PM
RE: Sweat -- short poem - by Lizzie - 05-30-2016, 09:01 AM
RE: Sweat, edit 1 - by RiverNotch - 05-31-2016, 12:40 AM
RE: Sweat, edit 1 - by Lizzie - 05-31-2016, 04:16 AM
RE: Sweat, edit 1 - by RiverNotch - 05-31-2016, 07:20 PM
RE: Sweat, edit 1 - by Todd - 06-01-2016, 02:11 AM
RE: Sweat, edit 1 - by Lizzie - 06-01-2016, 11:06 AM
RE: Sweat -- edit 2 - by Lizzie - 11-26-2016, 06:22 PM
RE: Sweat -- edit 2 - by Achebe - 11-27-2016, 04:46 AM
RE: Sweat -- edit 2 - by Lizzie - 12-02-2016, 10:34 AM
RE: Sweat -- edit 2 - by RiverNotch - 12-02-2016, 08:57 PM
RE: Sweat -- edit 2 - by Lizzie - 12-03-2016, 05:55 AM



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