My Spaceship

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Hi BecktheDog, most of what can be said about your poem I feel has been addressed in the above posts. Overall the poem lacks any real focus and continuous theme. You have created the opening line but every other part of the poem could be removed and little would be lost. I somewhat think that may have been the point, that there is a greater meaning to the first line to be drawn from the vagueness of the subsequent lines but that context is not shown. 


The upstairs room feels like a spaceship. I was taught that likening something or saying something "feels like" something else is bad poetry. Instead you have to say your metaphor is something rather than is like something.
A vessel to conduct my extracurricular endeavors
that will take me anywhere: This use of a colon sets up the audience to learn about how far your space ship will take you.
to Malaysia
or Alaska. Both of these places however are not planets, something you would need a spaceship for. If this is the point, say for example the striking comment to "save my sick mother" then there needs to be more clues as to why something as powerful as a space ship is needed to travel only around the world. This is not a bad idea, as it adds a sense of difficulty to movement and travel, apt for an idea of sick loved ones. But much like the Walt Whitman line it does not fit without any of this context.
to save my sick mother
or explore the inner workings of Walt Whitman's mind.
 
I've entered a ship with the windows closed. 
That contains all my gear for anything or anywhere.
Mental preparedness and physical appropriation
to make it happen. The use of "it" here is not the problem, as you can use that sort of vagueness well. But this should be done near the end of a poem and not at the center. Also the it should invoke all the context your lines have hinted at so far, but instead it simply hangs there.
 
I'm here with a feeling of inspired contentedness. What does this mean? So what? Why does it matter you are inpiried to feel? What does it matter you are motivated to feel satisfaction?
This is my place.
I'm ready.
 
 
I think I'll go downstairs... This is a very nice sounding way to end the poem and it does fit in well with the first line. Beginning with going upstairs, much like a rocket, then coming downstairs also as a rocket does.