Father,
#4
How are we estranged
by stars so far away?

What did they do to us
so far away?

Or were they the ones who moved
so far away --- in which case,
I don't think the issue is related. Otherwise, fair enough -- a case could be made for just removing the first two lines, though.
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Father, - by Tiger the Lion - 05-29-2016, 02:20 PM
RE: Father, - by Achebe - 05-29-2016, 09:22 PM
RE: Father, - by dukealien - 05-29-2016, 10:17 PM
RE: Father, - by RiverNotch - 05-31-2016, 12:58 AM



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