Sweat -- edit 2

[RiverNotch]

Sweat, edit 1.



Today I started to sweat, still waiting
for my son to come home safe.
For one iced moment, my bowels forgot
that John Wayne Gacy is frying in hell,
his skin burning crispy like the chicken he peddled,
and I don't believe in reincarnation.

I don't feel the anxiety as much with the slightly wordy diction, although this might just be because I got too-certain ideas from my latest read.

I started to sweat, waiting It's hot where I come from, so starting to sweat isn't so special. In fact, the emphasis on the fact that the speaker is starting to sweat feels off --- I'd much prefer if it was just matter of fact. Thus, no today --- and no still too, which either way is superfluous.
for my son to come home safe. Somewhat tempted to excise safe, with home already there.
For a moment, my bowels forgot Iced just doesn't feel right, so it's gone here.
that John Wayne Gacy is frying in hell,
his skin burning crispy like the chicken he peddled, JWG peddled chicken? Never knew --- otherwise, I think these two lines are just right, although I'm kind of on the fence on whether it should be crisp or crispy.
and I don't believe in reincarnation. The change in subject for what the bowels are thinking about is a little weird, but that inconsistency's excusable. Much prefer reincarnation.