Games

[Rogo]

Rogo - I like this. I understand it as a quick glance at gaming. In such capacity I think it works. A few nits, though. For one, this notion of glancing at a screen doesn't work with the gaming theme - games require concentration. For another this idea of editing "now" confuses me. Not sure what you meant there.

On the whole though I think this is inventive. Looking forward to more of yours. Cheers,

- Matt

I'm afraid the poem wasn't intended to be to be a quick glance at gaming. I was attempting to convey the lack of control over my own life and the society I live in. I wanted to use video games as an escape to a world where I am in control. 

The "screens" were meant to be a reference to the news, which I tried to explain with the sentence "I can't edit 'now'" — "now" as in the present. I was afraid the first stanza would be confusing, so I tried to use "another life" (another screen) as a double meaning for another life outside of reality and another life I got in the game. I see that my effort proved to be insufficient. If anyone has any ideas on how to properly implement this, I would love to hear them.

Thank you for your thoughtful critique, Mattp. It is greatly appreciated!

"litany" as in sacred song or complaint? Perhaps "series" might be more appropriate here?

I understand what you mean. I was trying to reference the phrase "litany of woes" as a sort of pun. I felt it made sense because it could be talking about the throws/punches in a fighting game, but also the throws (and woes) in real life. 

Thank you for your input!