Adrift

[Unknown]

The poem is good, but it can be improved. First, you need punctuation at the end of each section, as well as commas after almost every line. Right now, the poem seems a bit rushed. Also, the spacing of each section is a it out of whack, and while I understand that it is trying to show emphasis with the single line parts, you might want to add some stuff with those or bunch them together. It is a good poem, though, and I like it.