05-22-2016, 10:56 AM
Hi BeckTheDog,
I really like the idea of the mind or the imagination being a spaceship that can take you beyond the realm of any possibilities. And I also like how random the "sick mother" line seems to be because it reminds me of how intrusive and unavoidable the negative thoughts can be. As you're thinking of fantastic adventures to Malaysia and exploring outerspace, there's always that voice in your head reminding you of what it is that you're trying to avoid or escape from.
I feel like the line 'to make it happen' is a little too vague for me to understand. If it is a reference to your sick mother then I would try to be a little more specific in regards to what 'it' is. Overall though it is an interesting poem. And I like that the end is uplifting and brave as you vacate this place of 'inspired contentedness' to face your problems and 'go downstairs'.
I really like the idea of the mind or the imagination being a spaceship that can take you beyond the realm of any possibilities. And I also like how random the "sick mother" line seems to be because it reminds me of how intrusive and unavoidable the negative thoughts can be. As you're thinking of fantastic adventures to Malaysia and exploring outerspace, there's always that voice in your head reminding you of what it is that you're trying to avoid or escape from.
I feel like the line 'to make it happen' is a little too vague for me to understand. If it is a reference to your sick mother then I would try to be a little more specific in regards to what 'it' is. Overall though it is an interesting poem. And I like that the end is uplifting and brave as you vacate this place of 'inspired contentedness' to face your problems and 'go downstairs'.