Drum practice

[Magpie]

I could also not yet let go of "What is it that you do To get you through it all" line. I can let it out, but somehow I like the change of style, rhythm and perspective there. Is it really that cliche? 

It's more that the line felt very familiar as if I knew it from somewhere. I googled the line as a whole and then split up and noticed that there are a couple of songs called 'Through It All' and also the question "What do you do?" would be a cliche. So as a whole the line is not cliche but there are elements in it that made me think it might be bordering on cliche so I thought I should say. Perhaps someone else will come along and say something about it.

Also, for when you have done an edit, if you edit your original post and put the latest version of the poem first and call it 'edit 1' or '1st edit' or whatever and then underneath have the original and title that 'original' and then people will be able to see the progression. 

Mark