05-17-2016, 11:35 PM
EDIT #2
Alright in the second stanza I'm trying to show rather than tell. Thanks for all of your help!
Coffee Pants
A boy who can't walk without crutches
also can't carry a cup of coffee to his room
without spilling,
all
over
his
leg.
He sits down,
resting his crutches too.
His anger ebbs
and then flows
leaving joy
in its wake.
Alright in the second stanza I'm trying to show rather than tell. Thanks for all of your help!
Coffee Pants
A boy who can't walk without crutches
also can't carry a cup of coffee to his room
without spilling,
all
over
his
leg.
He sits down,
resting his crutches too.
His anger ebbs
and then flows
leaving joy
in its wake.