05-17-2016, 03:41 AM
Ah, thanks, Todd! The reason for the parentheses is as a way to convey (I hope) the more gradual noticing of what is missing and gone, as at first a basic awareness of burning is there and then, in a shift of awarenesss, the frogs, etc.
However. I will consider this carefully. Your suggestions for a rework of S1 in particular recommend themselves at ths moment.
And the seared horizons seems to read awkwardly to several so I'll take that into account also.
However. I will consider this carefully. Your suggestions for a rework of S1 in particular recommend themselves at ths moment.
And the seared horizons seems to read awkwardly to several so I'll take that into account also.