A Way to Go renamed The Fire Cure

[Todd]

A Way to Go

I want waterfeet
to walk this burning world--I wonder about burning here. You show it below in S2 and S4 even repeating the word there. I wonder if you are better served merging S1 and S2 and simply making all of S1 one line: I want waterfeet to walk this world. I do like your w sounds.
(where are the frogs?)--I'm not sure how I feel about these parentheticals. If they carried all the way down and functioned like a poem in a poem maybe, but as they sit they may be able to be cut.

marshes seethe,
sedges grasses forbs blaze up,
tall forests fall to fiery ground
birds drop sizzling from seared horizons--I like the image but I think you may want to consider reworking this a bit. I think the part I'm having issue with is the phrase from seared horizons. It may be better with a rework or simply cutting the phrase.
(where went the fishes, the cool mosses?)--Same issue as above.

mouth wind-blistered
skin spark-stung I watch--I like the first two phrases (wind-blistered, spark-stung)
as streams crackle and steam...

where are the frogs?
-- the frogs who call
the rain --
they are burning.--This is my favorite part. I would be inclined to use your waterfeet line and make this your new S1. Just a thought.

with little hope
I pray over my bluest socks
all night long and in the morning
put them on
still wet
and start walking.

(Been a dry spell since NaPM; this was sparked haha by the Fort McMurray fire in Canada and by my blue socks. I wonder if my title needs improvement; they often do. Open to your wisdom elsewise also, and thanks.)

I hope some of the comments are helpful.

Best,

Todd