05-16-2016, 10:44 AM
Hi, Beck, welcome to the Pen. 
I want to talk about the last four lines. I love them, they are the type of lines I write myself, but they are place holders. What they are saying is perfect and clear, the challenge is to express it in a striking, unique way, something the reader will absorb and feel. It's tough, but for me a worthwhile pastime.
I want to talk about the last four lines. I love them, they are the type of lines I write myself, but they are place holders. What they are saying is perfect and clear, the challenge is to express it in a striking, unique way, something the reader will absorb and feel. It's tough, but for me a worthwhile pastime.
(05-15-2016, 11:05 PM)BecktheDog Wrote: Coffee Pants
A boy who can't walk without crutches
also can't carry a cup of coffee to his room
without spilling,
all. over. his. leg.
The dispossessed feeling of anger and sadness
is waning,
and joy
is taking its place.
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