05-16-2016, 01:21 AM
Perhaps, in the future, I shouldn't comment on poems that I don't understand. (I'm very literal-minded and it takes a while for nuances to sink in.) Now that I have an interpretation of the poem that I think is right, I find it quite beautiful and moving (I am interpreting this as a fetus lost). I still think, however, an adjustment to the punctuation in the third line is needed:
we twisted into text; and through our phones
If my interpretation is correct, it's quite beautiful. The line about bones is breathtaking.
The original poem is better. However, I can't relate to the title.
we twisted into text; and through our phones
If my interpretation is correct, it's quite beautiful. The line about bones is breathtaking.
The original poem is better. However, I can't relate to the title.