05-15-2016, 12:56 PM
hi leanne. for me the edit made little change. and on further reading i'm not sure it was needed.
i really dug deep and saw the whole of the poem condensed in to one line;
for bringing forth the flesh and leaving bones?
while everything else supports it, this line more or less unlocks it.
i initially called ambiguity but the line opened it up to me; it still carries ambiguity, did the child physically die or did it just die inside. did you miss out on the child's life and feel guilty or were you guilty because you forgot about the presence. so no calls from me on the form. or the edit, both work as well as the other.
i really dug deep and saw the whole of the poem condensed in to one line;
for bringing forth the flesh and leaving bones?
while everything else supports it, this line more or less unlocks it.
i initially called ambiguity but the line opened it up to me; it still carries ambiguity, did the child physically die or did it just die inside. did you miss out on the child's life and feel guilty or were you guilty because you forgot about the presence. so no calls from me on the form. or the edit, both work as well as the other.