05-13-2016, 11:30 PM
Giving this a few edits, keeping it crazy but eliminating some of the more stray metapohors, plus adding a hook at the start to make the topic more explicit. The "star zig-zagging from the sky" is almost a direct quote taken from an account of the V2 falling on London from an altitude of fifty miles - they fly faster than the speed of sound, and you can't hear them coming. I wanted to keep this crazy, lots of up and down, as my emotional level has been pushed to many sleepless nights due to the bureaucratic explosion and lack of discipline within public education these last ten years. Thanks Achebe.