05-13-2016, 09:52 PM
"In response to Unsleep and too restless to sleep by Todd and be deep irrespectively "
This first line/title is lost on me.
The poem moves rhythmically, which adds so much to the meaning, imagery, and sound.
The line "in eternal sleeplessness" seems like an odd way to describe trees. I agree with the other responses: it feels as if the poem is unfinished. To what end is this scene taking the reader? If the arrival is unclear, then give the reader a better sense that there is no definitive ending to this poem.
This first line/title is lost on me.
The poem moves rhythmically, which adds so much to the meaning, imagery, and sound.
The line "in eternal sleeplessness" seems like an odd way to describe trees. I agree with the other responses: it feels as if the poem is unfinished. To what end is this scene taking the reader? If the arrival is unclear, then give the reader a better sense that there is no definitive ending to this poem.