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A key in the door
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05-13-2016, 08:51 AM
(05-13-2016, 03:47 AM)psychonaut Wrote: I very much enjoyed the description of the tangerine sun but something about the "he falls, a drunken sleep" line to me was slightly weaker than the restThank you for the comment and you feedback I will have a look at the line I agree it sounds forced to catch the rhyme. Best Keith If your undies fer you've been smoking through em, don't peg em out |
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A key in the door - by Keith - 05-10-2016, 09:20 AM
RE: A key in the door - by just mercedes - 05-10-2016, 12:13 PM
RE: A key in the door - by Keith - 05-11-2016, 06:45 AM
RE: A key in the door - by psychonaut - 05-13-2016, 03:47 AM
RE: A key in the door - by Keith - 05-13-2016, 08:51 AM
RE: A key in the door - by billy - 05-13-2016, 04:32 PM
RE: A key in the door - by Todd - 05-13-2016, 10:06 PM
RE: A key in the door - by Keith - 05-17-2016, 06:12 AM
RE: A key in the door - by Cousin Kil - 05-20-2016, 03:24 PM
RE: A key in the door - by Keith - 05-20-2016, 08:59 PM
RE: A key in the door - by kaleidoscope_vibes - 05-22-2016, 11:16 AM
RE: A key in the door - by Keith - 07-25-2016, 09:44 AM
RE: A key in the door - by bluegypsea - 08-01-2016, 04:05 AM
RE: A key in the door - by Keith - 08-03-2016, 03:23 AM
RE: A key in the door - by sapril - 08-05-2016, 01:52 PM
RE: A key in the door - by Keith - 08-10-2016, 03:17 AM
RE: A key in the door - by D.MYST - 09-02-2016, 04:32 PM
RE: A key in the door - by Keith - 09-09-2016, 09:33 PM
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