05-13-2016, 03:18 AM
My first impression when I was finished was that the poem could use an edit. I found myself distracted by the typos sometimes. Now, I once had and an anxiety problem, and I feel like you have accurately described what it feels like, and I can absolutely relate to that but for me it is missing that emotion that elevates a poem to the point of art instead of just a description. For me. For example you do a lot of telling me how to feel " I'm paralyzed, restless, paranoid" etc. instead of making me FEEL those things.