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~Seeds~
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05-13-2016, 03:02 AM
I enjoyed the finish of your poem, and it left me with a good taste in my mouth, however I also had trouble connecting the dots sometimes. I didn't get the shining screen reference but perhaps I'm just being thick. I did not care for the first couple lines of the poem and I thought they did not flow like they should anyway with all the sorry's and did not add enough contextually to make them worth it I.M.O. Maybe a different intro?
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RE: ~Seeds~ - by humility - 04-30-2016, 06:07 AM
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RE: ~Seeds~ - by Joseph Didis - 05-23-2016, 08:10 PM
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