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Lightning Truth
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05-13-2016, 02:52 AM
Hi! This is my first critic so don't hate me if it's not any good. I think that the line "treacherous doubt of uncertainty" is a little weak standing next to the rest of your poem, which in enjoyed very much. Also, its been a long time since I was in grammer school, but should it be "must have been so elusive" instead of "must of been so elusive"?
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Lightning Truth - by Taboosun - 05-11-2016, 12:37 AM
RE: Lightning Truth - by psychonaut - 05-13-2016, 02:52 AM
RE: Lightning Truth - by ChristopherSea - 05-13-2016, 11:16 AM
RE: Lightning Truth - by billy - 05-13-2016, 04:40 PM
RE: Lightning Truth - by Ivana - 05-18-2016, 07:02 AM
RE: Lightning Truth - by Wjames - 05-21-2016, 02:45 PM
RE: Lightning Truth - by Joseph Didis - 05-22-2016, 12:00 AM
RE: Lightning Truth - by gmc - 08-10-2016, 09:16 AM
RE: Lightning Truth - by QDeathstar - 08-10-2016, 10:48 AM
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