Oceans of Silver Cracks (REVISED)

[homer1950]

The eyes can sea

Only words on a page escape these many fissures.

What happens now I ask. 

I see nothing more than a face that shows no emotion,

but contains the sea where they all dwell.

Hi Q,

There has been much said already on your opening lines. My thoughts are on your closing.

You could drop the word many, I think it would make the line more concise.

Also "I ask" is not really needed since we know it is a first person poem. 

You might consider this: 

I see nothing more than a face "without" emotion,

"Its contents" the sea where they all dwell.

Thanks for posting this very imaginative 
Homer