sorry but i'm not that bothered about you the person or poet. i gave feedback on the poem as to how it affected me the reader. in truth in didn't and let's be honest here, it damn well should have. i wasn't affected by any feelings and i should have been. apart from a few words it gave me nothing, i didn't want an elegy. i wanted to be moved and possibly inspired. the poem did none of that. i'm fine you post in a poetry work shop and ask for serious feedback. just don't cry if you don't like what you see, if you feel a need to explain the piece after one or two pieces of feedback then just maybe the poem isn't getting across to the reader what you want to get across to the reader. to do a poem about such an established and well esteemed artist; it needs to be exceptional, it needs to make the reader feel some of what you feel. show me the ME you shout of, not some generic fan.
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as I am a performing musician, singer and songwriter, deeply felt.
that's the person's feelings i want to know of; sorry but i just didn't see it in the poem.
i'm fine being called out but usually it's just best to say thanks and ignore feedback you don't like or can't accept.
in response to:
as I am a performing musician, singer and songwriter, deeply felt.
that's the person's feelings i want to know of; sorry but i just didn't see it in the poem.
i'm fine being called out but usually it's just best to say thanks and ignore feedback you don't like or can't accept.