Smoking Stupid
#12
Hey again 71. Recognized you in this right away. You have a gift for sounding like you.

Bad girl gets nice boy to turn bad is a bit predictable. Could you make it a little more surprising?

I don't like "folks". They're young, doesn't sit right. Or "made love". If he's smoking a pack a day since then he'd be edgier than that now.

Just thoughts.

-jc
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Smoking Stupid - by 71degrees - 02-21-2016, 04:48 AM
RE: Smoking Stupid - by REW - 02-21-2016, 10:12 AM
RE: Smoking Stupid - by 71degrees - 02-22-2016, 01:29 PM
RE: Smoking Stupid - by Achebe - 02-21-2016, 11:03 AM
RE: Smoking Stupid - by RiverNotch - 02-21-2016, 09:20 PM
RE: Smoking Stupid - by mackzmike - 03-01-2016, 07:29 AM
RE: Smoking Stupid - by 71degrees - 03-13-2016, 06:11 AM
RE: Smoking Stupid - by jameso - 03-12-2016, 11:36 AM
RE: Smoking Stupid - by helenalovern@gmail.com - 03-13-2016, 05:13 AM
RE: Smoking Stupid - by Shrewbe - 04-18-2016, 04:31 PM
RE: Smoking Stupid - by 71degrees - 05-11-2016, 09:51 AM
RE: Smoking Stupid - by lr3ke100 - 04-21-2016, 06:03 AM
RE: Smoking Stupid - by justcloudy - 04-30-2016, 08:57 AM
RE: Smoking Stupid - by ellajam - 05-11-2016, 11:08 PM
RE: Smoking Stupid - by Jae Mc Donnell - 05-12-2016, 01:38 AM
RE: Smoking Stupid - by Cousin Kil - 05-13-2016, 04:00 AM
RE: Smoking Stupid - by 71degrees - 05-15-2016, 10:59 AM



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